Revise/Edit Lisa's Lunar New Year

1.Lisa was excited. 2.Today was lunar new year. 3.It was time to celebrate! 4.Lisa started the holiday by calling her grandparents. 5.She bowed to them over FaceTime. 6.Next, her mom gave Lisa a red envelope. 7.Inside was a gift of money for the new year.

8.Lisa’s friend Susie came over for lunch. 9.They eat noodles. 10.“These are long life noodles!” Lisa’s mom said. 11.“The longer the noodles, the longer our lives will be!”

12.After lunch, the family goes to the Chinatown parade. 13.Happy crowds stood along the streets. 14.They watched the famous Chinese dragon dance. 15.They heard people popping firecrackers. 16.“The firecracker noise scares off evil spirits!” Lisa’s dad said.

17.The parade ended. 18. Lisa’s dad disappeared. 18.He returned quickly with a special dessert. 19.The treat was yummy, crispy almond cookies. 20.It was a sweet end to their new year celebration. 21.It was also a great way to start the new year!

What change is needed to improve the clarity of sentence 12?

What change is needed in sentence 9?

What change needs to be made in sentence 2?

What is the best way to revise sentence 17 and 18?

What is this story mainly about?